Entry #7 Peer Assessment.

The pleasure of travelling:     

(My paragraph)        

Travelling nowadays around the world is significant, we travel perhaps once in a blue moon or we take a train, a bus, a plane or a ship every week, every month, every year. We travel in order to see other countries and continents, we cross deep oceans, high mountains, rivers and vast areas. Through travelling we meet different people, we visit old or modern cities and consequently we can learn about other cultures. From any point of view, travelling is an unforgettable experience for everybody, because forces us to lose sight of all that familiar things, our home and customs. In addition one of the best thing about travelling is that we experience new things and face a completely new world, and everything will be in our minds, forever. There is no better way of learning than travelling, it is enjoyable and memorable, it is not impossible to find out something new in other country. Whatever the place is, wherever we travel, whenever we do it, every day, every month, once a year or once in our life, travelling is significant and it will be a treasure stored in memory for everyone.

The pleasure of travelling:

(Version of my mate Magalí)

     Travel is important because it fundamentally transforms us. This experience of waking up to the power of your own transformation fires you up to “be the change you want to see in the world”. We travel in order to see other countries and continents, we cross deep oceans, high mountains, rivers and vast areas. Through travelling we meet different people, we visit old or modern cities and consequently we can learn about other cultures. From any point of view, travelling is an unforgettable experience for everybody, because forces us to lose sight of all that familiar things, our home and customs. In addition one of the best thing about travelling is that we experience new things and face a completely new world, and everything will be in our minds, forever. There is no better way of learning than travelling, it is enjoyable and memorable, it is not impossible to find out something new in other country. Travelling is important because it expands one's knowledge and understanding of the world. Travelling opens up people to other cultures and ideas.

Metacognitive analysis:

The peer assignment was purposeful. In the case of my second paragraph, the version of my mate Magalí changed the meaning of it. In her topic sentence, she refers to a transformation and that travelling is an experience which completely changes our mind whereas I talked about travelling as a hobby or something we do in our free time. On the other hand, her concluding sentence is similar to mine, but she supports the idea of that travelling expands our mind. For me, her concluding sentence is better than mine because is the most suitable conclusion of my paragraph, it gives a clear ending and best reflects the content of the paragraph. In comparison of my sentences to her sentences there are neither synonyms nor antonyms. Regarding wording, language has been taken into account by my mate and the elements of her sentences are developed in the paragraph.

ISFD 41 Licciardi, Magali. Tovagliari, Florencia.